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legs lost at the knees
voices in my head tell me not to fall

hands
sweaty
clenched and balled
mouth dry from the smoke and cold

arguements without meaning
aggression without speaking
mumbling fumbling attempt at chivalry

what
a
sight
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this one is an ode to some of my first days as barman watching the nightlife run its course :)

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Yay! First deviation!

This is a really cute and thought-provoking piece, it made me think of first love. It makes the reader really look into it to try and see what it means, what you were thinking when you wrote it. Well done!

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"You do not eat children! Yes, they are delicious, but we have laws!"

You found me when no-one else was looking, how did you know just where I would be?

VISIT ME
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thanks!!!, i guess it does a bit if you read it that way, i was sorta thinking drunk guy in bar but that works lol
:iconcursedarchangels:
hmmm double interpretation

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"You do not eat children! Yes, they are delicious, but we have laws!"

You found me when no-one else was looking, how did you know just where I would be?

VISIT ME

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August 16, 2009
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